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The following essay, “My Weekend”, contains multiple errors. Find as many errors as you can, and correct them.

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My Weekend

My weekend was awesome. I had a lot sort of fun. I went to Michigan Adventures with my friend, Alice, and her mom. We left early, at six in the morning. The drive take three hours. Once we was there, Alice and I go to alot rides. Alice doesn't get tired of rides; she always be up for something new. Rides is Alice thing.

Three most important rides to me is Thunderhawk, Mad Mouse, and Corkscrew. My favorite ride be Thunderhawk. The cart take you way up, then drop you down, fast. Then, you do loops. You be feelin like your feet are gonna get chopped off the whole time, but they don't. Or maybe they do, sometimes, with real tall people. That'd be bad. It feels like the ride be over in seconds, but its probably a couple minutes.

The Thunderhawk was great. On the Corkscrew, though, I had to sit next to this guy that smell bad and start singin Great Balls of Fire. By the end of the ride, his face in his hands, and he be cryin. He couldn't see where he goin' so a young woman with spiked pink hair and a Michigan Adventures uniform have to escort him off. I had been worried that he was going to throw up on me.

Me and Alice left the park at dinner-time, and her mother took us to eat at the food court in the Lakes Mall. It was a lot of good restaurants there. We ate some delicious food at Charlie's Grilled Subs. Afterward, we went shopping. It was the perfect end to the day.